writing fiction mostly boils down to getting things in exactly the right order. if no amount of work seems to fix a sentence/paragraph/chapter, it’s probably that it’s out of place. try plucking it out and seeing if it fits in somewhere else

@filet_o_calvin If you haven’t read @gariellelutz , highly recommended Their sentences are strange, beautifully, steamy, unexpectedly weird and profound Awoke 4am today to continue reading Magnificent

She definitely has our attention